changes made from draft 4 to draft 5

In draft 4 of our opening sequence we had new ways of improving by applying the following to our draft 5 :

• have a wider variety of shots for the flashbacks
• end the opening sequence with girl on floor crying 
• show audience what the girl is studying 
• have more shots of girl studying 
• show letter to make the information on it clearer
• use better angles in order to make it easier for audience to read what texts say
• if using a long text make sure timing is enough for audience to read it 
• make girl look more ill by the use of mise-en-scene
• pay attention to framing
• make sure that the person having the flashback is in the same position before and after the flashback to make it clear to the audience
• show she is cold by having a blanket and warm pyjamas 
• have girl in different positions when studying to show passing of time
• show clock to inform the audience of the time passing
• show girl before having point of view shots so audience know that the point of view is from the girl
• show titles of studios at the beginning of the opening sequence  
• make titles/credits longer
• show girl kneeling on floor when reads letter
• show slow motion of letter as girl drops it in disappointment
• add more effects of lighting to flashbacks 
• change what girl and friend say during the conversation about the party